proposal: improvements to description

proposal.yaml

@@ -21,22 +21,25 @@ Summary: |
 
 Description: |
 
-  Social media - in their current form - are toxic. Instead of 
+  Social media - in their current form - are toxic. Instead of
   connecting people, they have become tools for disinformation,
   distraction, and divisiveness.
   
   The industry is a quasi-monopoly which disregards privacy laws
-  day-in, day-out, yet goes unharmed because of regulatory capture.
+  day-in, day-out - yet goes unharmed because of regulatory capture.
   Their algorithms are built to capture as much of our attention as
-  possible - leading to the promotion of the most inciting content. 
+  possible - leading to the promotion of the most inciting content.
   Having captured users and advertisers, social media platforms are
   enshittified to extract more money for shareholders. Sometimes those
-  same shareholders have a weakness for antisemitic conspiracy theories
-  and decide to stop moderating any content on the platform. Nonetheless,
-  a lot of public political discourse is (still) happening on those same
-  social media platforms - and immediately manipulated by political
-  adversaries to serve their needs.
+  same shareholders have a weakness for antisemitic conspiracy
+  theories and decide to stop moderating any content on the platform:
+  with the sad but unsurprising result of more racist, sexist, xeno-,
+  homo- and transphobic, and other dehumanizing content. Nevertheless,
+  a lot of public political discourse is (still) happening on those
+  same social media platforms - which is then immediately manipulated
+  by political adversaries to serve their needs.
 
-  Can we imagine a less harmful form of social media? If yes, how would
-  it look like? And what role does free software play in this alternative?
+  Can we imagine a less harmful form of social media? If yes, how
+  would it look like? And what role does free software play in this
+  alternative?