From f1ff2de894b6f842c50fa8194ced393fce8b633f Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001 From: samtuke Date: Fri, 10 Sep 2010 12:21:08 +0000 Subject: [PATCH] most text rewritten svn path=/trunk/; revision=16690 --- news/2010/news-20100913-01.en.xhtml | 47 ++++++----------------------- 1 file changed, 10 insertions(+), 37 deletions(-) diff --git a/news/2010/news-20100913-01.en.xhtml b/news/2010/news-20100913-01.en.xhtml index 899e158949..6348b48635 100644 --- a/news/2010/news-20100913-01.en.xhtml +++ b/news/2010/news-20100913-01.en.xhtml @@ -1,52 +1,25 @@ - FSFE invites to track down advertising for non-free software -on governmental websites + Report proprietary s/w ads -

FSFE invites to track down advertising for non-free software on -governmental websites

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FSFE invites you to find and report proprietary software advertisements on government websites

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The Free Software Foundation Europe (FSFE) is -launching a campaign to sensibilize the public to the fact that government -websites are advertising for proprietary software, each time that they -redirect you to a downloading interface for a non-free PDFreader while -you have to read a PDF file.

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The Free Software Foundation Europe (FSFE) is launching a campaign to remove proprietary software advertisements from government websites. Every time that state websites link to non-Free applications and encourage visitors to use them, they unnecessarily threaten their citizens' choice and freedom.

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What would you think about a sign on the highway stating “You need a Volkswagen to drive on this road. Contact your Volkswagen dealer for a gratis test drive – Your Government”? When it comes to PDF reading software, governments seem to think that this is acceptable.

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What would you think about a sign on the highway saying "You need a -Rolls Royce to drive on this road. Contact your Rolls Royce dealer for a gratis -test drive -- Your Government". Governments do exactly this with PDF reader software.

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Websites such as pdfreaders.org, launched by a FSFE fellowship group early last year, demonstrate that a variety of Free Software PDF readers exist for all major operating systems. Yet despite this fact many publicly funded sites continue to endorse one particular application.

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Such endorsements give unfair advantage to whichever proprietary product they recommend, and are often accompanied by inaccurate statements presenting the application as the only available option.

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Launched by the Fellowship of FSFE, pdfreaders.org -is a site providing information about Free Software PDF readers for all -major operating systems. It clearly shows that there are many programs to -read and write PDF documents. Grounding on the conviction that governments -should not advertise for one private product, in this case a non-free PDF -reader presented as the only possibility to read PDF documents when there -are several alternatives. By doing so, governmental institutions give -indeed an economical advantage to the advertised product over its competitors.

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FSFE invites everybody to search through governmental websites for advertising -and to notify them -to the FSFE.We also invite you to sign the petition for governmental websites without advertisement for non-free PDFreaders.

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FSFE invites European citizens to seek out proprietary software advertisements on their government's websites, and report them. In addition, FSFE has prepared a petition demanding an end to such advertising practices, and encourages the public to sign it.

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This collection of governmental URL will take place from September, -13th to October 17th 2010. It takes the form of a contest in which people -notifying the most advertisements will recieve a price at the end of October. -

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We hope to see you soon on our hunter list

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The hunt begins on September 13th, and will continue until October 17th 2010. Prizes will be awarded at the end of October to the individual or group who reports the greatest number of infringing government websites.

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Good hunting!