From ed15d3a74df2548187e69d6a9359ceee10697670 Mon Sep 17 00:00:00 2001
From: greve <greve@fsfe.org>
Date: Sun, 11 Jul 2004 15:34:34 +0000
Subject: [PATCH] Some fixes & feedback by JG

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@@ -16,24 +16,24 @@ liberties in a digital society."</h2>
 <p>The Free Software Foundation Europe (FSF Europe) is a charitable
 non-governmental organisation largely based upon two visions.</p>
 
-<p>Firstly the vision of Free Software as a stable basis for freedom
-in a digital world -- both in an economic and sociological-ethical context.
-Access to software determines who may participate in a digital
-society. Therefore the freedoms to use, copy, modify and redistribute
-software - as described in the Free Software definition - allow equal
-participation in the information age.</p>
+<p>Firstly, the vision of Free Software as a stable basis for freedom
+in a digital world -- both in an economic and sociological-ethical
+context.  Access to software determines who may participate in a
+digital society. Therefore, the freedoms to use, copy, modify and
+redistribute software - as described in the Free Software definition -
+allow equal participation in the information age.</p>
 
-<p>Therefore the FSF Europe is dedicated to supporting all aspects of Free
+<p>The FSF Europe is dedicated to supporting all aspects of Free
 Software in Europe. Creating awareness for these issues, securing Free
 Software politically and legally, and giving people freedom by
 supporting development of Free Software are central issues of the FSF
-Europe.  The FSF Europe was founded in 2001 as the European financially, legally
-and personally independent sister organisation of the <a
-href="http://www.fsf.org/fsf/fsf.html">Free Software Foundation</a> in
-Boston, MA, USA.</p>
+Europe. The FSF Europe was founded in 2001 as the European sister
+organisation of the <a href="http://www.fsf.org/fsf/fsf.html">Free
+Software Foundation</a> in Boston, MA, USA. They are financially,
+legally and personally independent from each other.</p>
 
 <p>The second vision is that of a Europe united in the spirit of
-cooperation across cultural boundaries.</p>
+co-operation across cultural boundaries.</p>
 
 <p>Not only do we need to deal with the political reality of the
 European Union, which already maintains large parts of the governance